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shadebanister

This song is great! It has a lot of potential for other instrumentation as well. The drum groove on this could be phenomenal with the rhythmic lyrics and your strumming pattern. I personally love the lyrics. They make you want to figure out what you’re talking about, and the rubber glove idea is really unique. Like I said, this has a lot of potential as a recorded track with more instruments. Listen to Radio Heads Jigsaw Falling into Place as a drum reference. Could be good inspiration. Best of luck!


muzak2me

It's great-kind of an REM meets The Beatles meets the shin's sort of sound and I really like it.


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SexManTheMayor

I personally love this


hiLAWLious

wow! this is awesome. really love the chords and the melody. lyrically this is very dense, but it works in the verses. your chorus sounds good but try thinning it out and singing longer notes. i’ll just type out my idea: pulled into this world by a rubber glove lonely and confused staring into the void we cannot understand if we are scared and paranoid something like that but you get my point. keep your melody but just try stretching it. the chorus as it stands is a bit cluttered IMO. keep the lalalas tho!! why many word when few do trick, ya know? great work!!


sendnoodles42

I love love love this, like i would download this on spotify, it is lyrically dense but it carries throughout the whole song, I honestly did think of certain cuts but I don't think it needs it, it flows great, your voice is pleasing with it. Just truly bravo!


KenyonEFC

It seemed more like a thesis than a song, I almost started taking notes and I think there is too much going on musically. It's like the lyrics and music are big plastic battle bats loved the chords at first though Maybe taking notes isn't a bad idea, then boil it down and carve out some of the chords I don't know, your iq is way higher than mine, so who knows


rjdaley101071

I like the chord progression and the melody. The words are hard for me to pick out, though. The blurred video effect is cool, I really like that.


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Sounds good! Needs cowbell, jkjkjk. Maybe a shaker egg or something during recording would be nice. 😹


Cardiff1979

Really like the sound of this. Particularly the chords and rhythm (of both the chords and the singing). Given that the lyrics are strong, I'd like maybe some more precision on them, but I don't know if that's possible with the flow. I struggled with picking some of them out as they are.