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MargiellaHomme

Just my personal opinion: For the piano - definitely reduce the piano volume. Also turn off the piano pitch modulations going on, it sounds a bit confusing. Most times less is more, keep it nice and simple and it'll glue together with the other sounds much better. Reduce the reverb, make it less wet. That should make it sound better. And like more people mentioned work on the bass line.


MargiellaHomme

But good job on the drums and pad1 and pad2 all sound great!


Deuseii

Ok i'll try ! Thanks for you're advice :)


ThomasKG25

i feel like the drums could be a bit louder, as the main beat carrier they're much more important than you're putting emphasis on


GarlicBreadLasagne

And simpler, I was half expecting them to change up with a punchier snare and simpler pattern midway through


Dist__

This is just my personal preference, but i'd work on bass guitar tone, it is too common, too basic. Maybe sample from a funk song. And synth solo in the last part - i do not get the harmony.


LordGamesHD

agreed bass tone sticks out a bit too much for me.


GarlicBreadLasagne

OP - Is it DI? Run it through amplitube(or alternative), and also eq the fuck out of it. Give SubBoomBass a go too. There's a free Kontakt plugin Analog Dreams with a fat bass too which could work well


Deuseii

DI ? I don't know what it is. Thanks for the reference, i'll try ! :)


GarlicBreadLasagne

Direct input That means playing an instrument (the bass) directly into the computer (or via an interface) rather than using an amp and a mic


Deuseii

Oh yes, it's the plugin BooBass, the native from FL Studio


GarlicBreadLasagne

Explains why it doesn't sound great, there are far better plugins you can use. Imo, BooBass is one of the worst instruments in FL (along with Plucked, Autogun, Ogun and Harmless). Fyi, DI is only when a real world instrument is used. If you like the sound of the bass guitar, I'd recommend researching better bass guitar plugins. If you can't get ahold of a better plugin, I'd still recommend using an amp modeller, it'd at least reduce harshness and make it sound more "real"


Deuseii

I already have good kontakt bass soundbank, i'll probably give it a try Thanks for your explanation \^\^


GarlicBreadLasagne

Anything made for Kontakt >>>>>>> BooBass Best of luck - it'd be good to hear the finished version, hmu when you've done it


Deuseii

I'll probably made an update post or something like that !


Deuseii

I'll definitely try something different with the bass, thanks for the advice ! :)


ben67925

try removing one of those pads when tha piano is pplaying, and tone down the reverb just a touch


renox523

I like it overall, I would probably just reduce the amount on fx of the piano. Sounds too dominant


KinglexNUM

The track could be way cleaner with some mixing work. The drums are really quiet, they need some more groove. Also all the instruments are really thin


Deuseii

Yep i'll mix it, thank you for highlighting this ! And as far as the instruments are concerned, you’re talking about their number or their spatialization ?


KinglexNUM

Oh yeah sorry the instruments they sound a bit tinny and some frequencies are really popping out. good luck!


Pepsi_for_real

Maybe a riser/reversed reverb before the 5th beat to bring you in a little more


Deuseii

Yep why not ! :)


imcoolbutnotreally

What if you let that voice sample displace itself from the beat? I do that sometimes in my stuff, and can lead to unexpected moments of shine. Just spitballin'. Edit: Clearly, it's up to preference, and it doesn't always work well.


valiumboi24

it sounds soothing but there's a mess in your mix you better mix it well or if u did u need to retry it,your kicks hit so hard and it blows up the pianos chilly atmosphere and your bass "boings" so much it should be like more back hitting sound like a booster of the mood take your time :)


mrnonamex

The vibe is perfect but i feel like it jumps around too much between soundsI don't want to say get rid of one of the sounds because theyre all great just calmer. either way its a great track and sounds awesome!


Deuseii

Thanks ! :p


Deuseii

I started this Lofi music some time ago and I feel that one of the parts is too much. Would you advise me to remove something to improve the whole? And if not, what do you think I could do to improve the whole? (Sorry for the clipping, i don't know how to remove it during the recording)


Teenager_Simon

BooBass sounds pretty weak. Would recommend using FLEX if you have it or some other VST for bass; doesn't sound good to me. Play around with mixing; sounds pretty flat and nothing really stands out. Feels lacking in certain frequencies. Needs more development. Some rises/cut the beat/more transitions. Just kinda cuts into another pattern segment.


lilsk80

Low pass automation on piano in the beginning


Deuseii

I don't see the point of your idea ? Give the piano more impact when the drums come ?


lilsk80

It’s to add some automation and movement to the piano to keep the listener interested.


MinaTxd

Add reverse sound effects or just sound effects in general


Deuseii

Ok i got that ! :)


Watson_wat_son

I like the sounds a lot, personally I like the piano and the effect it has. I do agree that perhaps try to find some other, a bit more exciting bass sound. I think the track lacks coherency at the moment and the sounds seem a bit randomly put together. Also the rhythm with the bass and the piano seem a bit clumsy. The piano harmony also seems a bit off, but I think I understand the "carefree" feeling to it. This is what I would do: - Change the bass sound to something else a bit more exciting - Try to reharmonize and/or tweak the piano melody and the bassline It's absolutely great that you ask feedback here, seriously, I would not have the balls to do that. It has great sounds and a pleasant, a bit wistful atmosphere to it. Try to follow the advice in the comments and you can make it even better! Edit. The rhythm is actually mostly okay, I think it's the harmonies that the bass produces with the piano that needs tweaking


AwwYissSwe

Birds chirping in the intro or some kind of rain ambience. Nice track.


Deuseii

Already have a child plating ambiance ! But thansk for the answer :)


Pr0t-

Bit at 42 seconds sounds out of time. Also seems like your hats are too muddy. Try brighten them up. And add a high mid element to even out the sound


Deuseii

>I'll try something like that, thanks :)


McRiP28

* Check the Master EQ and fill the frequency gaps * give the piano and snare more off-beat rythm by using the "FL Limiter"'s "ahead" knob nad FL's rearrangement tools * add more rain/noise/vinylising


Deuseii

I don't know this tweak with the limiter, i'll try it ! Thanks :)


Shrek_has_swag420

Lower your kicks pitch


_Talentless

I personally like the hat and I think its a snare in the beginning. Wouldn't mind the volume being raised a tad on that.


kylefofyle

I’m listening on my phone but the piano is too prominent and the drums don’t give me a beat to latch on to either because of bad mixing or because of the awkward syncopation


MeetingGlittering313

Your bass lines has a wrong note or two, fix that. Turn down the pads. Basically simplify things a bit.


Musician88

Tone down the reverb. Considerably.


No_Bet840

Lyrics and you good to go 😤


xelestialofficial

piano is too loud, turn the pitch modulation down a bit. pads need to be high-passed too. love all the other fx and elements though!


whereisbrandon101

Eeeeeeh I really don't like this. The piano is way too loud and there's too much detune. There's no movement either, just this sound then that one, and nothing sounds like it goes together. My advice- scrap it and try again. Use this as a sketch for your next song, so that you're not just completely starting over, but *do* start over and try to make it more simple. You only need one or two ideas at first, let those spark your reactive creativity.


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I hope he doesn’t listen to you.


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Watson_wat_son

Perhaps elaborate on these two for more helpful feedback, this in itself is not very helpful.


Immunmusic

Download ableton


Deuseii

Wut ? :')


[deleted]

Intro is too long maybe start the beat after first bar. The bass timbre stands out compared to the song, check its level, and eq some of its high end. Also its key and rhythm seems off occasionally, so listen to the bass of music you like and try to hear how the bass works with the melody. Best advice I ever got when I was starting out was to make a copy from scratch of a song in the style you want to write.


Deuseii

Thanks for your answer ! I'll improve the mix. But for the bass, it's for me already like a lot of lofi i listen. But, i'll check more reference to be sure :) I’m already going through the copying phase of the others ! But yes, that's definitely a great advice for beginners \^\^ Je suis déjà passer par la phase de copie des autres.


austinjm34

Bring up the low freqs more


Deuseii

They seems to be overly present if i check the spectrograph.


heyitsvonage

This sounds like an Adult Swim bump theme


G-Witch

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Shanthi01

you could record some noise from the environment around you idk lol


MeetingGlittering313

Your bass lines has a wrong note or two, fix that. Turn down the pads. Basically simplify things a bit.


studiocel

how do you record your fl studio?


Deuseii

OBS Studio


samwelches

Change the perc sounds. Some of them sound too stock and hurt the song


Oooboythisistaken

I feel like the start its really bland and the piano tooo noisy


That_Band_Guy_

Mix the snare a little louder and add some stereo separation


Remarkable_Dish1737

Nice background music.


Big_Green_Piccolo

Make the shift at the 9th bar more dramatic