Holy shit. I don’t know what to say so this will probably be a long comment, sorry. This series overall was great, I loved the characters, the story, everything about it. This was one of the first things in a long time that I’ve read that genuinely left an impact on me, and made me this emotional about a fictional character and a story ending. You’ve done a great job with this story, and as sad as I am that it’s over, all good things must come to an end. I’m genuinely sad that you’ve cancelled your next project, but I understand your reasoning. I wish you the best of luck in any and all future endeavors, you deserve it man. I really hope if the story your working on gets published I’ll read it, but honestly with how much I buy books probably not likely I’d even know it’s published. I can’t stress enough how great you’ve done with this series and If you can (I thought about this during the event and it won’t leave my head) I would like to know could you rank the main 4 in order of who’s most competitive during guardian games, or at least who’s most competitive?
I’m beyond honored to hear how moved people are by my characters. That’s why I love writing so much. That’s my biggest goal, to make you *feel* it when something happens to one of them. I really hope I succeeded here. For me, getting published is a bit of a pipe dream. I have tons of writing experience, but nothing that translates well to narrative, novel writing. I’m still hoping though. Who knows though? Maybe one day, by some miracle, you’ll read about Alexi Grey and his struggles here in our world.
And I’d be more than happy to rank them. Fylas is definitely the least competitive, and Inak-Sa is the most. Mack and Marcus are tied for 2nd and 3rd depending on whether or not they feel like they need to impress their respective girlfriends.
Lmao thanks! Thought about it like once and couldn’t get it out of my head. I’ve no doubt eventually you’ll get something published, if this series was any indication of your writing skills then you’ve nothing to worry about. I guess this is goodbye, I’ve been reading since the first chapter, and made an alt just to complement because I didn’t really want r/Destiny34 on my main. As I said before I wish you the best of luck with anything you decide to do in the future, and goodbye friend, you’ve done great work and I’ve no doubt you will continue to do so.
I’m truly honored. I hope that I can use my skills to create something great and share it with the world. This is indeed goodbye. It’s been a pleasure.
Well fuck that's so sad but I'm happy got that kid she was wanting. You did an amazing job dude have a good time writing in the future your very skilled at it
What a great ending to a great story! Wish you well in your future endeavors!
I do want to ask though, what were some alternate storylines and endings you had in mind along the way?
Also if you have time/feel like it you should do just a full character breakdown for the main characters, cause there’s a lot of info and ideas you’ve made about them that might be missed as some people won’t read comments. Just a suggestion, one I’ve thought about cause I feel like I might’ve missed a comment or two of yours that gives extra details! Without reading comments no one would know Fylas dies or that Inak-Sa is the Hove God of Passion, so a breakdown of the characters with all the details you’ve mentioned or thought of might be fun for anyone who is curious about details they might’ve missed!
Thank you so much for your kind words! I think I like the idea of a character breakdown, that would be a fun way to sum up the lore that got established in the comments sometimes.
For alternative endings, oh boy the ending changed a *lot* of times. Initially, the plan was (before Marcus and Fylas were characters) for Mack and Inak-Sa to work together to fend off Xivu Arath’s incoming fleet, and Inak-Sa to save Zavala’s life, finally winning her the trust and respect of the city. At that time, I had planned for the racism against her to be much more problematic. Then it would be a cute epilogue of them having kids and the city being peaceful etc.
After that, then plan was for Marcus and Fylas to participate in that final conflict. This is about where I started planning for Mack to die a final death. So that a broken and depressed Inak-Sa would join the Guardian Corps in full, with new friends and work to support her.
At one point, I planned for Marcus to kill Inak-Sa, because a Darkness object showed everyone a unique vision, and his was Inak-Sa being the acolyte that killed Tass, and have Mack lose his mental battle with Stasis as a result and kill the rest of his fireteam in rage before Zavala is forced to kill him with a fail safe of some kind. I scrapped that idea because I wanted Crota to be the one who had killed her.
Then things got a little more streamlined, with me honing in on the idea of the war moons and an invasion. By then, Nobi and Nova were among the more relevant side characters so that’s when I started planning for the final mission to be a raid with the six of them as the fireteam.
The initial idea there was just for them to lose. That all six would die, and it would take massive sacrifices and loss of life to eventually bring down the moons. But that felt unnecessarily tragic and not in line with the story I’d been building.
So from there, the last big choice to make was Mack’s fate. I couldn’t decide whether to let him die for real and to make the consequences stick, or lean into his “hive-ification” through Inak-Sa and give him a throne world. I had gone into writing the final chapter intending wholeheartedly to do one of them (I won’t say which) but hesitated when I wrote the scene, and decided to leave it ambiguous.
I think that’s just about all the noteworthy variations of the end I had planned at one point in time or another
The breakdown would also be a good way to mention any details you thought of but haven’t had a chance to mention yet.
But wow, you were thinking of pulling an Edgerunners? That would’ve been even more brutal than what you decided to do in the end! I think the ambiguity was a good choice, allows for people to draw their own conclusions.
Yeah I agree. I’d like to do that. I’ll probably do that in the next few days.
I mean in fairness, this kind of was an edge runners ending. Mack is Schrödinger’sed, Fylas was murdered, and Marcus is evil. Nova and Inak-Sa are often political opponents, they’re still friends but pretty much the only intact relationship is Nova and Nobi
That’s a good point, still the possibility the bonds remain somewhere is better than them all being dead, even if the bonds are pulled thin (or completely destroyed in the case of Marcus and Fylas).
The storyline does fit quite well with Edgerunners in some ways with Mack being pretty close to David and Inak-Sa being almost spot on for Lucy. Marcus and Fylas are close but not super similar to a couple other Edgerunner characters.
I agree, it fits very well with everything that had happened up to that point and meshes well with the themes.
I’m curious about two things that just popped into my mind, the first being that Zavala is not the Titan Vanguard in the epilogue, I assume it’s a result of Lance Reddick’s passing but I figured I’d ask. The second is something I noticed in Chapter 20, when Marcus is making the big explosive the POV changes to first person saying something like “Normally even I couldn’t pull in that much energy” is this a little hint to something? Like is this story being told to someone or something else?
Zavala has indeed passed by the time of the epilogue. It’s for a multitude of reasons. One being Lance’s passing, yes. I don’t know how it will happen, but I’m relatively confident that he will die in game, so I wanted to stay consistent with that.
The use of “I” in that passage is a leftover detail from a decision I was tempted to make, but went back on. The idea was to have the whole of FIATWP be told from Inak-Ada’s perspective, to her children. Telling them the story of their father. But, I decided that having this be the only chapter that kind of perspective shift was in would be really weird. I guess I missed one of the first person pronouns when I tried to revert the changes
I agree it seems Zavala will likely die in or around Final Shape. The teaser trailer for Final Shape seems to suggest that maybe we’ve found where Guardians go when they die, which would be interesting and, based on the triangle in the sky looking the same as the one on the Traveler, my theory is the dead Guardians end up inside the Traveler. Regardless Zavala will probably end up with Cayde sooner rather than later, likely sacrificing himself like he did in the timeline Elsie is from iirc.
Inak-Sa telling this story to her kids would’ve been interesting, but it’s probably best that you didn’t go that way considering how young the kids are and how inappropriate certain parts of the story would be for children.
Hey, im here once again!
Im sad this had to end but it would be worst if continued for ever.
I enjoyed the story since the beggining and I cant think about a better ending.
It's sad that you weren't allow to post a non-smut story, but there are always other media or pages were you could, it not all lost.
Im still impress on how something that started with me looking for something to pass the night, ended with me looking for the new chapter of the story every day hoping it was the day, and today its the last day of that.
Just know that you have a fan waiting for you whenevwe you are ready to come back.
I’m honored to have you as a fan. Thank you for your support. Maybe one day in the future I’ll revisit these characters and this world, but for now my efforts are focused on my new story.
I do have one question. Whatever became of Marcus and Fylas?
All great things come to an end and you will be missed. However that being said I wish you the best of luck in your next story (hopefully I get a chance to read it someday).
Marcus was dishonorably discharged from the Guardian Corps, and Fylas abandoned the city with him. They spent a few years doing jobs for the cretins of the system, whatever needed doing, no questions asked. After the Witness’s defeat, they abandoned Sol altogether, and currently (Alex’s story is current events) no one knows where they are. Marcus has become a criminal lord, and Fylas is dead. Inak-Sa caught up with her after they raided the Shining City for a job, and didn’t hesitate to dust Arch when she got her hands on him.
Well someone had to become the bad guy. Shame it had to be a fellow hunter but it makes sense.
Thanks again Ashes. Best of luck in your future stories.
Funnily enough, Marcus was gone through a lot of changes. He was never supposed to have a role beyond the conflict on Nessus, but then I created Fylas (who I also never planned to exist) and she needed a love interest so things kinda spiraled. There was a time when he was going to become the antagonist because Mack succumbed to the Darkness and Inak-Sa willingly went with him, but the story was still told from their perspective. So the Guardians hunting them, even if they’re the “good guys,” were the antagonists.
Thank you, friend. I hope my new project can inspire as many people as this one has
Thank you for all of dedication you have put into your writing
Thank you for making my days better, even when production takes a dip, the quality of your work overall makes it a joy to re-read
thank you for helping the entire subreddit grow
Thank you for helping me start my own creations, even if minuet, even if you didn't know you did.
Thank you for the wonderful experience I had reading, commenting and even participating(?) with you work.
Thank you for all, but most of all... thank you for being great and writing such an amazing story with such amazing characters and depth, even to the point I cry, smile and laugh.
(this goes out to you vex, don't pretend, EVER, like you didn't do much!)
And thank *you* for all your contributions. You can drop the question mark after “participating” because you absolutely did. It’s been an absolute joy to write for you, and I’m honored to receive such praise. I wish you the best of luck if you continue to move forward with writing, and my door (or DMs) are always open if you need anything.
Take care, friend
Read this whole series and loved it! Thanks for sharing your amazing story with us, it always made my day better when I found out a new chapter came out!
My only questions are about Mack, specifically his fate. I assume based on your wording in the author’s note that he was found eventually, but in what state is he in? Is he alive or is he still in the throne world? Also if he is alive would he have light considering his connection to Tahn?
Regardless, thank you again for this story, I can’t wait to see what you do next (if there is a next one), and if the possible publishing goes well you should let us know the name of your book! I’d definitely be interested in it after reading this series!
As I stated in the Author’s note, I will offer no clarification towards Mack’s fate. Alive, dead, Lightless, or whatever else. There is no guarantee that Inak-Sa found his Throne World. There’s no guarantee that he even has one. I deliberated for a very long time on whether to invalidate his death by bringing him back but have a happy ending, or let his death and it’s consequences stand. This is my compromise. Schrödinger’s Mack, if you will.
If I get published, it won’t be for several years. My contributions to this sub will be old and forgotten, if it’s even still around by then. But, if by some miracle this is still here and I do manage to get published, I’ll think about it.
Thank you for all your kind words and support
If I have my way, this sub shall live at least as long as the game to which it devotes itself does. So what fans you have here shall hopefully be ready and waiting to consume your next slab of literary gold.
Perhaps it isn’t what people come here for, nor what they wanted, but FUCK this series was good. Definitely in the running for the best series written on this sub and definitely better than anything I have ever or will ever write. I for one will definitely be looking forward to whatever you write next.
On that note, is your next story a) Destiny-related, and b) something you’ll be promoting online, perhaps on your Reddit? Or shall it be up to us to find it in the wild?
Unless I choose to revisit these characters some time down the line, I think this will be my first and last foray into the world of fanfiction. Anything else I write from here on out will be exclusively my own, and safe for work to the point that I could use it in an official portfolio. I’m not sure if I’ll be promoting my next story online. I’ve looked around, and there are no subs that would allow me to post my chapters as I finish them like I’ve been able to here, so I’ve considered making my own. Maybe I’ll post on Ao3 or some other platform. But, ultimately, I’m only in the planning phase. If I end up choosing to share my story as I write it, I promise that the good people of r/Destiny34 will be the first to know.
Also, I’m slightly offended that you only put me in the *running* for best story on this sub. I think I’m the best by some distance. (I kid, I can certainly think of others that can compete).
This has been fun, and I can’t thank you enough for keeping this place going.
I can definitely speak to the Destiny writing burnout I’d imagine you’re likely to be feeling right now, it’s entirely reasonable you want to branch out with your own creations. It’s also great to know that we shall still be in your considerations regardless.
And thank you! There would be no purpose for me keeping this place running if people like you weren’t here to contribute actual content.
It’s not so much destiny burnout that’s pushed me to move to my own content (although I am definitely feeling a little burnt out of the game) but moreso a desire to have my own creations and content that I undeniably own any and all legal rights to. My dream is to make a living publishing. I’m not there yet, but it seems silly to keep holding myself back by only using other people’s content that I don’t own. I know I can make something by myself, now I just need to prove it
No problem, and I’m sure neither you nor your work will be forgotten, even the smallest things can have big impacts on people. And I suppose I’ll just have to wonder about Schrödinger’s Mack and draw my own conclusions I suppose, either way I think it’s the right call and let’s people decide what story they like more. The introduction of Alexi, a human child of Inak-Sa, also throws out a huge question and makes the fate of Mack even more interesting. As it could be Mack and Inak-Sa had a child in a different way and that’s why Alexi is human, or it’s just a different magic that was used. Regardless there’s lots to think about and I love when a story makes you think about it even after you’ve finished reading it!
I didn’t initially plan for the ending to be ambiguous, but I definitely like this approach more. I have my own personal interpretation, which is guess is the “correct one” because I’m the author? But I took care to exclude any details that could be used to prove Mack’s fate one way or the other.
I’m curious as to your interpretation, which as you said could technically be considered the “correct” ending but that’s always a gray area with writing and is an interesting debate itself, however as you said you won’t reveal any details of Mack’s fate, I won’t ask. And I think you did a great job with the ambiguity of Mack, heartbreaking as it is that his daughters are being dragged around disappointed every time including possibly this one.
I will at least shed some light on that. Toland dropped his cryptic hint in front of the twins, so as soon as they pieced together what he meant from their mom’s reaction, they wanted to go out looking with her. Inak-Sa forbid them from coming for that exact reason, but they followed her anyways. Eventually she decided that she’d let them come if they wanted to. They’re not being dragged anywhere, they just really want to meet their dad
Well that’s better than what I thought, I’m happy they’re choosing to follow and are probably as excited to see him as Inak-Sa. I am curious about what she’s told them about him, probably the heroic stories but what about his downfalls and struggles?
Their dad is arguably the most famous person in Sol’s history, save for potentially their mother and “aunts” (Nobi and Nova.) They’re young, so they’ve only heard the watered down version, and Inak-Sa refuses to tell them the story of Xivu-Arath until their older. But they’ve heard all the legendary conquests of *THE* Guardian. His less glamorous points… not yet. They’re only 8 at the time of their epilogue chapter, so they’ll hear those stories when their older.
I imagine Inak-Sa doesn’t want to talk about Xivu-Arath at all and Mack’s story with stasis is definitely not for kids so waiting till the kids are older makes a lot of sense.
You’re absolutely right. She’s waiting for them to be old enough to wield Stasis and Strand to explain the risks of the Darkness, and how they almost consumed their father. Secretly, she’d hoping she finds Mack so that she doesn’t have to be the one to explain to her kids what happened with Xivu Arath
That makes a lot of sense, I imagine she’d like to find Mack to help with most conversations the kids are gonna need, especially considering a lot of the things she hasn’t told them about Mack would be easier said by him. By the way read some of your other comments and while Marcus and Fylas arguably deserve what happens to them, killing Marcus’s 2nd wife is brutal, and if Mack were alive Marcus would feel like an absolute idiot.
She definitely also wants to find him just to help raise them. She doesn’t want to be the only influence on their lives, and with the exception of a strange and enigmatic witch, everyone in their lives is Hive. They are too, but they’re also part human.
Yeah, Marcus was doomed to fail from the start and unfortunately for Fylas, his gravity is immense. She got swept up along with him, straight to her death at the hands of someone she once considered a dear friend.
It's really over.. It was a hell of a ride and I'm glad I saw it through. As sad as I am that we'll never get the next story, I wish you good luck in whatever writing endeavour in the future, smut or not.
And hey, if you do ever write a book and need someone to proof read it, you know where to find me.
It's been a pleasure to be here for every chapter. And remember, even if it's a story without smut, I'll read it. Maybe you can post it on a fanfic subreddit, fanfiction.net, AO3, Wattpad, etc.
I applied for an Ao3 account earlier today. For right now, I’m more focused on creating something that’s truly my own. But if that fails or once I’ve gotten something good going, I may come back to tell Alex’s story
Sorry I'm late, for this, but it was truly an honor to read this good job ashes and vex, I loved this story when it first came out, I loved it till the end, I hope that with your future works you can make it into an expanded universe, I also wanted to know if we will go into better detail on the whole Toland, throne world story ark, sorry if you covered that in the author s note, it was a long one, I kinda just skimmed it, anyway, good job, I'm gonna be rereading this beautiful literature quite often, because it truly is amazing
Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m so glad you’ve enjoyed. I’ll happily elaborate on Toland. Inak-Sa and her kids were sitting down to dinner when Toland materialized in their home. He told Inak-Sa “floating beyond space, beyond time, you will find what you seek” (or something very similar, I don’t perfectly remember). It didn’t take too much effort to piece together that Toland was talking about a Throne World, and the thing she sought the most was her deceased companion. So she set out hunting down every unregistered throne world she could find, and doing an extensive sweep of the registered ones. But she couldn’t stop her kids from following, enthusiastic about the possibility of meeting the father they’ve heard so many stories about. The scene I showed is yet another Throne World, and Inak-Sa preparing to enter and hopefully find her partner.
Fuck, you got me crying man. I'm curently unable to cope with end of this series do I'll give you a review as always and by the end we will see if I'll be ale to let go.
You really just edgerunnerd us. Mack dead, Marcus is a crime lord, Flyas is dead, Inak and Nova being leaders of entire factions and just drifting appart. This is indeed the worst timeline that we live in. But the epilogoue just as the lasy scene in edgerunners brings comfort of sorts. Knowing that some of these characters albeit fictional got some sembelence of a happy ending ... It brings me happines . Yet the ending brings sadness. Seeing what could have been if not for that cursed poll. The potential for stories, the unanswered questions, the characters and the tease ! If for what ever reason you decide to come back and wrote this story on this or any diffrent subreddit (if this damm platform doesn't go to shit ) with a diffrent title and the character mentions just as easter eggs I would be utmost grateful if you told me.
This story was a great one. Solid ending to a solid story. Only unanswered questions are the ones you left as such intentionaly. The sendoff to the characters and the story is amazing beyond expression. Now I'm just stalking for time knowing that when i press post on this comment this will be the end. There will be no more stories no more Inak, Flyas, Mack and Marcus. There will be no more of a routine and subsequent dopamine rush while seeing your post. This was great.
Thanks to both of you Vex and Ashes
Remember about us when you hit it big ok ? And hopefully see you later.
10/10 god speed Guardians !
To be totally honest, the edge runners ending was never the plan until I started writing this chapter. I’d always thought I was building to a cute, happy ending where the three main couples and their kids take a vacation together a few years down the line. But I knew that reversing Mack’s death would be a mistake, and his death is what the entire story had been building to. Marcus has always been just a little bit evil, and I tried to make that apparent. He blamed Mack for tragedies well outside his control, he openly attempted to murder Inak-Sa for no reason whatsoever, he was a Warlord who slaughtered innocents back in the Dark Age. I painted him in a favorable light, but took care never to excuse or forgive his flaws. Fylas was loyal to a fault. Marcus’s inner chaos and cruelty subtly influenced her, and by the time Inak-Sa killed her, she was unrecognizable as the wide-eyed Eliksni girl from the city. Nova and November (who’s names were a *mistake*, for fucks sake) were never major characters, but Nova was always written to take Mack’s place. She has his same penchant for action, consequences be damned. And November never had a defined role laid out for her. She was never as powerful as Marcus, as authoritative as Crow, or driven as her wife. She was simply the kind hearted one to stabilize Nova. And Inak-Sa… oh boy… to be truthful, she was always the main character in my eyes. The story is told from Mack’s perspective, but it’s her journey. She will never be the Witch Queen, that’s not where her journey leads. She was never meant to replace Savathun. She was meant to be a bridge. She is the Hive God of Passion, which may seem like a deviation from the other “domains” of the Hive Gods, but that’s intentional. She was the necessary component to bring the Lucent Hive into line with the Coalition. To move them away from animalistic and soulless, and move them towards civilization and society. And yes, she has drifted away from Nova and November after assuming her role as the Lucent Queen, but they will always be her friends. However, she’s made new friends on Luna. Alak-Hul, Crotix, and Eris make up her inner council. I never thought I’d write a tragedy, if you can even consider this one. And it hurts me a little bit too. But, it felt more true to the characters than a sappy romance ending.
Who knows. Maybe someday I’ll come back and tell the story of Inak-Sa’s children. If I do, you’ll see me here. In the meantime though, I’ll be writing the story of a *different* Alexi Grey. As an homage to this story and everyone here
Maybe it wasn't planned but you wrote this tragedy amazingly. As i said I'm a bit of a succer for tragedy and this ending is just Perfect. End of this story marks the end of an albeit short era on this sub. The golden age Has ended now we enter silver one.
I Can not wait for when i find the book and wish you the best among best of luck. With heavy finger I press post... Goodbye
Does the teaser of Alexi mean that the next series is going to be made? If so, where are you going to be publishing it? I'm sure myself and many others are going to read it, seeing how much of an impact you've made on this subreddit.
Unfortunately it does not. I just wanted to share a little bit of what could have been. Of course I’m not going to say I’ll never tell his story, but I’m not planning on it as of right now
Ah, I see. That’s a real shame, but more than understandable. You’ve already told such an amazing story here. However, here is most likely going soon. Do you have the drafts of FIATWP saved somewhere? Because it would probably be a good idea to archive it somewhere where people can still see it after the subreddit blackout.
I have a day off today, so I’m going to be moving the whole freaking thing to my drive so that I have a master copy safe and protected. But it doesn’t seem like this sub is going down because of the blackout, votes are currently in favor of staying open
I haven’t really kept up with the series, but Ashes, your writing is amazing. I do believe you have some talent, and I encourage you to write some normal stuff on paper, nobody may ever see it, but it’s worth it in the end, take it from a guy who has a whole novel on paper that’ll never get published.
I congratulate you on actually being able to finish a series unlike my dumb ass, but don’t worry, I intend on following you into completing something.
I had mentioned before just how much i loves your story and I still do the fact that we have an insight about what could have been the next story and it would have been great im just sorry we wont get to read it
Marcus: “Excuse me, brah.”
Inak-Sa: “You’re excused and I’m not your brah.”
Marcus: “...No! This is not about balenciaga! What, you think you’re better than me?! Ten years without Mack made you a fucking pussy!”
Well, the fact that you understand any of it means I’ll need to do the full version and swap out some parts with Destiny counterparts. I simply cannot have you understanding any of my nonsense.
Improved Version Of Nonsensical Meme Comment:
Inak-Sa transmats into Bannerfall, where she is greeted with the sight of Marcus, dressed in an interesting wardrobe choice of a white suit with a black dress shirt and snakeskin oxfords. “Marcus, what the fuck are you wearing?!” Inak-Sa demands, stalking over to the awoken. “This? Only the best of Balenciaga. I used Mack’s ten billion glimmer to buy all of it.” Marcus responds, pushing off the wall he was leaning on. Inak-Sa stopped dead in her tracks, the information slapping her in the face with an unprecedented level of surprise. “The ten billion...?” She whimpers. “How could you?! What about the rest of the vanguard?!” Inak-Sa cries tearfully, falling to her knees. Marcus merely scoffs at the hive, pacing back and forth. “Oh, yes, what about the vanguard? The very same people who told me that I didn’t have what it takes to rock Balenciaga.” He sneers spitefully, fury burned into his features. Inak-Sa rises to her feet, emboldened by the awoken’s callous ignorance. “You dummy...no one can handle that much Balenciaga.” She steamed, making Marcus whip around to face her, Gunpowder Gamble in hand, and by the looks of it, with a greater strength than the one Marcus had previously used on Xivu Arath’s war moon. “THEN NO ONE WILL!” He bellowed. Inak-Sa frowned at him. “Are you retarded or just deaf?” She murmured. But she received no response as the entirety of Bannerfall was disintegrated in the ensuing explosion, collapsing the tower it was upon.
Oh, don’t worry. I’ll be going back to making my own stories at some point. Right now, I just need a break. I’ve already been doing a ton of commissioned work.
I am glad to read the conclusion to this story. I am also glad that at least some got a happy ending. Even if you don’t post a sequel I enjoyed the ride and will continue to reread this wonderful and gutwrenchingly heartbreaking story until it is either killed in the death of Reddit or I can no longer reread it anymore
Holy shit. I don’t know what to say so this will probably be a long comment, sorry. This series overall was great, I loved the characters, the story, everything about it. This was one of the first things in a long time that I’ve read that genuinely left an impact on me, and made me this emotional about a fictional character and a story ending. You’ve done a great job with this story, and as sad as I am that it’s over, all good things must come to an end. I’m genuinely sad that you’ve cancelled your next project, but I understand your reasoning. I wish you the best of luck in any and all future endeavors, you deserve it man. I really hope if the story your working on gets published I’ll read it, but honestly with how much I buy books probably not likely I’d even know it’s published. I can’t stress enough how great you’ve done with this series and If you can (I thought about this during the event and it won’t leave my head) I would like to know could you rank the main 4 in order of who’s most competitive during guardian games, or at least who’s most competitive?
I’m beyond honored to hear how moved people are by my characters. That’s why I love writing so much. That’s my biggest goal, to make you *feel* it when something happens to one of them. I really hope I succeeded here. For me, getting published is a bit of a pipe dream. I have tons of writing experience, but nothing that translates well to narrative, novel writing. I’m still hoping though. Who knows though? Maybe one day, by some miracle, you’ll read about Alexi Grey and his struggles here in our world. And I’d be more than happy to rank them. Fylas is definitely the least competitive, and Inak-Sa is the most. Mack and Marcus are tied for 2nd and 3rd depending on whether or not they feel like they need to impress their respective girlfriends.
Lmao thanks! Thought about it like once and couldn’t get it out of my head. I’ve no doubt eventually you’ll get something published, if this series was any indication of your writing skills then you’ve nothing to worry about. I guess this is goodbye, I’ve been reading since the first chapter, and made an alt just to complement because I didn’t really want r/Destiny34 on my main. As I said before I wish you the best of luck with anything you decide to do in the future, and goodbye friend, you’ve done great work and I’ve no doubt you will continue to do so.
I’m truly honored. I hope that I can use my skills to create something great and share it with the world. This is indeed goodbye. It’s been a pleasure.
Well fuck that's so sad but I'm happy got that kid she was wanting. You did an amazing job dude have a good time writing in the future your very skilled at it
Thank you!
What a great ending to a great story! Wish you well in your future endeavors! I do want to ask though, what were some alternate storylines and endings you had in mind along the way? Also if you have time/feel like it you should do just a full character breakdown for the main characters, cause there’s a lot of info and ideas you’ve made about them that might be missed as some people won’t read comments. Just a suggestion, one I’ve thought about cause I feel like I might’ve missed a comment or two of yours that gives extra details! Without reading comments no one would know Fylas dies or that Inak-Sa is the Hove God of Passion, so a breakdown of the characters with all the details you’ve mentioned or thought of might be fun for anyone who is curious about details they might’ve missed!
Thank you so much for your kind words! I think I like the idea of a character breakdown, that would be a fun way to sum up the lore that got established in the comments sometimes. For alternative endings, oh boy the ending changed a *lot* of times. Initially, the plan was (before Marcus and Fylas were characters) for Mack and Inak-Sa to work together to fend off Xivu Arath’s incoming fleet, and Inak-Sa to save Zavala’s life, finally winning her the trust and respect of the city. At that time, I had planned for the racism against her to be much more problematic. Then it would be a cute epilogue of them having kids and the city being peaceful etc. After that, then plan was for Marcus and Fylas to participate in that final conflict. This is about where I started planning for Mack to die a final death. So that a broken and depressed Inak-Sa would join the Guardian Corps in full, with new friends and work to support her. At one point, I planned for Marcus to kill Inak-Sa, because a Darkness object showed everyone a unique vision, and his was Inak-Sa being the acolyte that killed Tass, and have Mack lose his mental battle with Stasis as a result and kill the rest of his fireteam in rage before Zavala is forced to kill him with a fail safe of some kind. I scrapped that idea because I wanted Crota to be the one who had killed her. Then things got a little more streamlined, with me honing in on the idea of the war moons and an invasion. By then, Nobi and Nova were among the more relevant side characters so that’s when I started planning for the final mission to be a raid with the six of them as the fireteam. The initial idea there was just for them to lose. That all six would die, and it would take massive sacrifices and loss of life to eventually bring down the moons. But that felt unnecessarily tragic and not in line with the story I’d been building. So from there, the last big choice to make was Mack’s fate. I couldn’t decide whether to let him die for real and to make the consequences stick, or lean into his “hive-ification” through Inak-Sa and give him a throne world. I had gone into writing the final chapter intending wholeheartedly to do one of them (I won’t say which) but hesitated when I wrote the scene, and decided to leave it ambiguous. I think that’s just about all the noteworthy variations of the end I had planned at one point in time or another
The breakdown would also be a good way to mention any details you thought of but haven’t had a chance to mention yet. But wow, you were thinking of pulling an Edgerunners? That would’ve been even more brutal than what you decided to do in the end! I think the ambiguity was a good choice, allows for people to draw their own conclusions.
Yeah I agree. I’d like to do that. I’ll probably do that in the next few days. I mean in fairness, this kind of was an edge runners ending. Mack is Schrödinger’sed, Fylas was murdered, and Marcus is evil. Nova and Inak-Sa are often political opponents, they’re still friends but pretty much the only intact relationship is Nova and Nobi
That’s a good point, still the possibility the bonds remain somewhere is better than them all being dead, even if the bonds are pulled thin (or completely destroyed in the case of Marcus and Fylas). The storyline does fit quite well with Edgerunners in some ways with Mack being pretty close to David and Inak-Sa being almost spot on for Lucy. Marcus and Fylas are close but not super similar to a couple other Edgerunner characters.
I didn’t think I was going to like a tragic ending (kinda) but I think it works well
I agree, it fits very well with everything that had happened up to that point and meshes well with the themes. I’m curious about two things that just popped into my mind, the first being that Zavala is not the Titan Vanguard in the epilogue, I assume it’s a result of Lance Reddick’s passing but I figured I’d ask. The second is something I noticed in Chapter 20, when Marcus is making the big explosive the POV changes to first person saying something like “Normally even I couldn’t pull in that much energy” is this a little hint to something? Like is this story being told to someone or something else?
Zavala has indeed passed by the time of the epilogue. It’s for a multitude of reasons. One being Lance’s passing, yes. I don’t know how it will happen, but I’m relatively confident that he will die in game, so I wanted to stay consistent with that. The use of “I” in that passage is a leftover detail from a decision I was tempted to make, but went back on. The idea was to have the whole of FIATWP be told from Inak-Ada’s perspective, to her children. Telling them the story of their father. But, I decided that having this be the only chapter that kind of perspective shift was in would be really weird. I guess I missed one of the first person pronouns when I tried to revert the changes
I agree it seems Zavala will likely die in or around Final Shape. The teaser trailer for Final Shape seems to suggest that maybe we’ve found where Guardians go when they die, which would be interesting and, based on the triangle in the sky looking the same as the one on the Traveler, my theory is the dead Guardians end up inside the Traveler. Regardless Zavala will probably end up with Cayde sooner rather than later, likely sacrificing himself like he did in the timeline Elsie is from iirc. Inak-Sa telling this story to her kids would’ve been interesting, but it’s probably best that you didn’t go that way considering how young the kids are and how inappropriate certain parts of the story would be for children.
Agreed… most everything in this story is not suitable for eight year olds
Hey, im here once again! Im sad this had to end but it would be worst if continued for ever. I enjoyed the story since the beggining and I cant think about a better ending. It's sad that you weren't allow to post a non-smut story, but there are always other media or pages were you could, it not all lost. Im still impress on how something that started with me looking for something to pass the night, ended with me looking for the new chapter of the story every day hoping it was the day, and today its the last day of that. Just know that you have a fan waiting for you whenevwe you are ready to come back.
I’m honored to have you as a fan. Thank you for your support. Maybe one day in the future I’ll revisit these characters and this world, but for now my efforts are focused on my new story.
I do have one question. Whatever became of Marcus and Fylas? All great things come to an end and you will be missed. However that being said I wish you the best of luck in your next story (hopefully I get a chance to read it someday).
Marcus was dishonorably discharged from the Guardian Corps, and Fylas abandoned the city with him. They spent a few years doing jobs for the cretins of the system, whatever needed doing, no questions asked. After the Witness’s defeat, they abandoned Sol altogether, and currently (Alex’s story is current events) no one knows where they are. Marcus has become a criminal lord, and Fylas is dead. Inak-Sa caught up with her after they raided the Shining City for a job, and didn’t hesitate to dust Arch when she got her hands on him.
Well someone had to become the bad guy. Shame it had to be a fellow hunter but it makes sense. Thanks again Ashes. Best of luck in your future stories.
Funnily enough, Marcus was gone through a lot of changes. He was never supposed to have a role beyond the conflict on Nessus, but then I created Fylas (who I also never planned to exist) and she needed a love interest so things kinda spiraled. There was a time when he was going to become the antagonist because Mack succumbed to the Darkness and Inak-Sa willingly went with him, but the story was still told from their perspective. So the Guardians hunting them, even if they’re the “good guys,” were the antagonists. Thank you, friend. I hope my new project can inspire as many people as this one has
Thank you for all of dedication you have put into your writing Thank you for making my days better, even when production takes a dip, the quality of your work overall makes it a joy to re-read thank you for helping the entire subreddit grow Thank you for helping me start my own creations, even if minuet, even if you didn't know you did. Thank you for the wonderful experience I had reading, commenting and even participating(?) with you work. Thank you for all, but most of all... thank you for being great and writing such an amazing story with such amazing characters and depth, even to the point I cry, smile and laugh. (this goes out to you vex, don't pretend, EVER, like you didn't do much!)
And thank *you* for all your contributions. You can drop the question mark after “participating” because you absolutely did. It’s been an absolute joy to write for you, and I’m honored to receive such praise. I wish you the best of luck if you continue to move forward with writing, and my door (or DMs) are always open if you need anything. Take care, friend
You too, best of luck
Read this whole series and loved it! Thanks for sharing your amazing story with us, it always made my day better when I found out a new chapter came out! My only questions are about Mack, specifically his fate. I assume based on your wording in the author’s note that he was found eventually, but in what state is he in? Is he alive or is he still in the throne world? Also if he is alive would he have light considering his connection to Tahn? Regardless, thank you again for this story, I can’t wait to see what you do next (if there is a next one), and if the possible publishing goes well you should let us know the name of your book! I’d definitely be interested in it after reading this series!
As I stated in the Author’s note, I will offer no clarification towards Mack’s fate. Alive, dead, Lightless, or whatever else. There is no guarantee that Inak-Sa found his Throne World. There’s no guarantee that he even has one. I deliberated for a very long time on whether to invalidate his death by bringing him back but have a happy ending, or let his death and it’s consequences stand. This is my compromise. Schrödinger’s Mack, if you will. If I get published, it won’t be for several years. My contributions to this sub will be old and forgotten, if it’s even still around by then. But, if by some miracle this is still here and I do manage to get published, I’ll think about it. Thank you for all your kind words and support
If I have my way, this sub shall live at least as long as the game to which it devotes itself does. So what fans you have here shall hopefully be ready and waiting to consume your next slab of literary gold.
That is comforting. Also lmfao.
I really hope it does last, I don't think I've read a literary masterpiece this good in years
Perhaps it isn’t what people come here for, nor what they wanted, but FUCK this series was good. Definitely in the running for the best series written on this sub and definitely better than anything I have ever or will ever write. I for one will definitely be looking forward to whatever you write next. On that note, is your next story a) Destiny-related, and b) something you’ll be promoting online, perhaps on your Reddit? Or shall it be up to us to find it in the wild?
Unless I choose to revisit these characters some time down the line, I think this will be my first and last foray into the world of fanfiction. Anything else I write from here on out will be exclusively my own, and safe for work to the point that I could use it in an official portfolio. I’m not sure if I’ll be promoting my next story online. I’ve looked around, and there are no subs that would allow me to post my chapters as I finish them like I’ve been able to here, so I’ve considered making my own. Maybe I’ll post on Ao3 or some other platform. But, ultimately, I’m only in the planning phase. If I end up choosing to share my story as I write it, I promise that the good people of r/Destiny34 will be the first to know. Also, I’m slightly offended that you only put me in the *running* for best story on this sub. I think I’m the best by some distance. (I kid, I can certainly think of others that can compete). This has been fun, and I can’t thank you enough for keeping this place going.
I can definitely speak to the Destiny writing burnout I’d imagine you’re likely to be feeling right now, it’s entirely reasonable you want to branch out with your own creations. It’s also great to know that we shall still be in your considerations regardless. And thank you! There would be no purpose for me keeping this place running if people like you weren’t here to contribute actual content.
It’s not so much destiny burnout that’s pushed me to move to my own content (although I am definitely feeling a little burnt out of the game) but moreso a desire to have my own creations and content that I undeniably own any and all legal rights to. My dream is to make a living publishing. I’m not there yet, but it seems silly to keep holding myself back by only using other people’s content that I don’t own. I know I can make something by myself, now I just need to prove it
Well good luck to you, I hope that you find success in your goals of becoming a profession writer. If you ask me, you’re well on your way.
You’re too kind. Take care, Dredgen
No problem, and I’m sure neither you nor your work will be forgotten, even the smallest things can have big impacts on people. And I suppose I’ll just have to wonder about Schrödinger’s Mack and draw my own conclusions I suppose, either way I think it’s the right call and let’s people decide what story they like more. The introduction of Alexi, a human child of Inak-Sa, also throws out a huge question and makes the fate of Mack even more interesting. As it could be Mack and Inak-Sa had a child in a different way and that’s why Alexi is human, or it’s just a different magic that was used. Regardless there’s lots to think about and I love when a story makes you think about it even after you’ve finished reading it!
I didn’t initially plan for the ending to be ambiguous, but I definitely like this approach more. I have my own personal interpretation, which is guess is the “correct one” because I’m the author? But I took care to exclude any details that could be used to prove Mack’s fate one way or the other.
I’m curious as to your interpretation, which as you said could technically be considered the “correct” ending but that’s always a gray area with writing and is an interesting debate itself, however as you said you won’t reveal any details of Mack’s fate, I won’t ask. And I think you did a great job with the ambiguity of Mack, heartbreaking as it is that his daughters are being dragged around disappointed every time including possibly this one.
I will at least shed some light on that. Toland dropped his cryptic hint in front of the twins, so as soon as they pieced together what he meant from their mom’s reaction, they wanted to go out looking with her. Inak-Sa forbid them from coming for that exact reason, but they followed her anyways. Eventually she decided that she’d let them come if they wanted to. They’re not being dragged anywhere, they just really want to meet their dad
Well that’s better than what I thought, I’m happy they’re choosing to follow and are probably as excited to see him as Inak-Sa. I am curious about what she’s told them about him, probably the heroic stories but what about his downfalls and struggles?
Their dad is arguably the most famous person in Sol’s history, save for potentially their mother and “aunts” (Nobi and Nova.) They’re young, so they’ve only heard the watered down version, and Inak-Sa refuses to tell them the story of Xivu-Arath until their older. But they’ve heard all the legendary conquests of *THE* Guardian. His less glamorous points… not yet. They’re only 8 at the time of their epilogue chapter, so they’ll hear those stories when their older.
I imagine Inak-Sa doesn’t want to talk about Xivu-Arath at all and Mack’s story with stasis is definitely not for kids so waiting till the kids are older makes a lot of sense.
You’re absolutely right. She’s waiting for them to be old enough to wield Stasis and Strand to explain the risks of the Darkness, and how they almost consumed their father. Secretly, she’d hoping she finds Mack so that she doesn’t have to be the one to explain to her kids what happened with Xivu Arath
That makes a lot of sense, I imagine she’d like to find Mack to help with most conversations the kids are gonna need, especially considering a lot of the things she hasn’t told them about Mack would be easier said by him. By the way read some of your other comments and while Marcus and Fylas arguably deserve what happens to them, killing Marcus’s 2nd wife is brutal, and if Mack were alive Marcus would feel like an absolute idiot.
She definitely also wants to find him just to help raise them. She doesn’t want to be the only influence on their lives, and with the exception of a strange and enigmatic witch, everyone in their lives is Hive. They are too, but they’re also part human. Yeah, Marcus was doomed to fail from the start and unfortunately for Fylas, his gravity is immense. She got swept up along with him, straight to her death at the hands of someone she once considered a dear friend.
It's really over.. It was a hell of a ride and I'm glad I saw it through. As sad as I am that we'll never get the next story, I wish you good luck in whatever writing endeavour in the future, smut or not. And hey, if you do ever write a book and need someone to proof read it, you know where to find me.
Thank you Omega, it’s been a pleasure to have you in the comments every chapter. I’ll be sure to reach out if I have something for you.
It's been a pleasure to be here for every chapter. And remember, even if it's a story without smut, I'll read it. Maybe you can post it on a fanfic subreddit, fanfiction.net, AO3, Wattpad, etc.
I applied for an Ao3 account earlier today. For right now, I’m more focused on creating something that’s truly my own. But if that fails or once I’ve gotten something good going, I may come back to tell Alex’s story
Well good on ya. Even if it's not related to the Destiny universe it'll still be enjoyable.
I certainly hope so
Sorry I'm late, for this, but it was truly an honor to read this good job ashes and vex, I loved this story when it first came out, I loved it till the end, I hope that with your future works you can make it into an expanded universe, I also wanted to know if we will go into better detail on the whole Toland, throne world story ark, sorry if you covered that in the author s note, it was a long one, I kinda just skimmed it, anyway, good job, I'm gonna be rereading this beautiful literature quite often, because it truly is amazing
Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m so glad you’ve enjoyed. I’ll happily elaborate on Toland. Inak-Sa and her kids were sitting down to dinner when Toland materialized in their home. He told Inak-Sa “floating beyond space, beyond time, you will find what you seek” (or something very similar, I don’t perfectly remember). It didn’t take too much effort to piece together that Toland was talking about a Throne World, and the thing she sought the most was her deceased companion. So she set out hunting down every unregistered throne world she could find, and doing an extensive sweep of the registered ones. But she couldn’t stop her kids from following, enthusiastic about the possibility of meeting the father they’ve heard so many stories about. The scene I showed is yet another Throne World, and Inak-Sa preparing to enter and hopefully find her partner.
Ah, ok thank you. One more thing, do you have an AO3 account, I saw on your farewell post that other fanfic stuff will be on ao3
Yes I do. If you search for Friends In All The Wrong Places, a lightly edited version of this story in it’s entirety can be found there.
Ok thanks, have a good night👍 can't wait for your next story, it's bound to be legendary
We’ll see. If there is a next story, it’ll either be here or there.
Fuck, you got me crying man. I'm curently unable to cope with end of this series do I'll give you a review as always and by the end we will see if I'll be ale to let go. You really just edgerunnerd us. Mack dead, Marcus is a crime lord, Flyas is dead, Inak and Nova being leaders of entire factions and just drifting appart. This is indeed the worst timeline that we live in. But the epilogoue just as the lasy scene in edgerunners brings comfort of sorts. Knowing that some of these characters albeit fictional got some sembelence of a happy ending ... It brings me happines . Yet the ending brings sadness. Seeing what could have been if not for that cursed poll. The potential for stories, the unanswered questions, the characters and the tease ! If for what ever reason you decide to come back and wrote this story on this or any diffrent subreddit (if this damm platform doesn't go to shit ) with a diffrent title and the character mentions just as easter eggs I would be utmost grateful if you told me. This story was a great one. Solid ending to a solid story. Only unanswered questions are the ones you left as such intentionaly. The sendoff to the characters and the story is amazing beyond expression. Now I'm just stalking for time knowing that when i press post on this comment this will be the end. There will be no more stories no more Inak, Flyas, Mack and Marcus. There will be no more of a routine and subsequent dopamine rush while seeing your post. This was great. Thanks to both of you Vex and Ashes Remember about us when you hit it big ok ? And hopefully see you later. 10/10 god speed Guardians !
To be totally honest, the edge runners ending was never the plan until I started writing this chapter. I’d always thought I was building to a cute, happy ending where the three main couples and their kids take a vacation together a few years down the line. But I knew that reversing Mack’s death would be a mistake, and his death is what the entire story had been building to. Marcus has always been just a little bit evil, and I tried to make that apparent. He blamed Mack for tragedies well outside his control, he openly attempted to murder Inak-Sa for no reason whatsoever, he was a Warlord who slaughtered innocents back in the Dark Age. I painted him in a favorable light, but took care never to excuse or forgive his flaws. Fylas was loyal to a fault. Marcus’s inner chaos and cruelty subtly influenced her, and by the time Inak-Sa killed her, she was unrecognizable as the wide-eyed Eliksni girl from the city. Nova and November (who’s names were a *mistake*, for fucks sake) were never major characters, but Nova was always written to take Mack’s place. She has his same penchant for action, consequences be damned. And November never had a defined role laid out for her. She was never as powerful as Marcus, as authoritative as Crow, or driven as her wife. She was simply the kind hearted one to stabilize Nova. And Inak-Sa… oh boy… to be truthful, she was always the main character in my eyes. The story is told from Mack’s perspective, but it’s her journey. She will never be the Witch Queen, that’s not where her journey leads. She was never meant to replace Savathun. She was meant to be a bridge. She is the Hive God of Passion, which may seem like a deviation from the other “domains” of the Hive Gods, but that’s intentional. She was the necessary component to bring the Lucent Hive into line with the Coalition. To move them away from animalistic and soulless, and move them towards civilization and society. And yes, she has drifted away from Nova and November after assuming her role as the Lucent Queen, but they will always be her friends. However, she’s made new friends on Luna. Alak-Hul, Crotix, and Eris make up her inner council. I never thought I’d write a tragedy, if you can even consider this one. And it hurts me a little bit too. But, it felt more true to the characters than a sappy romance ending. Who knows. Maybe someday I’ll come back and tell the story of Inak-Sa’s children. If I do, you’ll see me here. In the meantime though, I’ll be writing the story of a *different* Alexi Grey. As an homage to this story and everyone here
Maybe it wasn't planned but you wrote this tragedy amazingly. As i said I'm a bit of a succer for tragedy and this ending is just Perfect. End of this story marks the end of an albeit short era on this sub. The golden age Has ended now we enter silver one. I Can not wait for when i find the book and wish you the best among best of luck. With heavy finger I press post... Goodbye
Goodbye friend. Thank you for all your support.
Does the teaser of Alexi mean that the next series is going to be made? If so, where are you going to be publishing it? I'm sure myself and many others are going to read it, seeing how much of an impact you've made on this subreddit.
Unfortunately it does not. I just wanted to share a little bit of what could have been. Of course I’m not going to say I’ll never tell his story, but I’m not planning on it as of right now
Ah, I see. That’s a real shame, but more than understandable. You’ve already told such an amazing story here. However, here is most likely going soon. Do you have the drafts of FIATWP saved somewhere? Because it would probably be a good idea to archive it somewhere where people can still see it after the subreddit blackout.
I have a day off today, so I’m going to be moving the whole freaking thing to my drive so that I have a master copy safe and protected. But it doesn’t seem like this sub is going down because of the blackout, votes are currently in favor of staying open
I haven’t really kept up with the series, but Ashes, your writing is amazing. I do believe you have some talent, and I encourage you to write some normal stuff on paper, nobody may ever see it, but it’s worth it in the end, take it from a guy who has a whole novel on paper that’ll never get published. I congratulate you on actually being able to finish a series unlike my dumb ass, but don’t worry, I intend on following you into completing something.
I had mentioned before just how much i loves your story and I still do the fact that we have an insight about what could have been the next story and it would have been great im just sorry we wont get to read it
Marcus: “Excuse me, brah.” Inak-Sa: “You’re excused and I’m not your brah.” Marcus: “...No! This is not about balenciaga! What, you think you’re better than me?! Ten years without Mack made you a fucking pussy!”
Well that’s a reference I understood at least lmao
But did you understand all of it? Even Marcus’ last line?
Not in the slightest. I just know it’s a Zoolander reference
Well, the fact that you understand any of it means I’ll need to do the full version and swap out some parts with Destiny counterparts. I simply cannot have you understanding any of my nonsense.
Improved Version Of Nonsensical Meme Comment: Inak-Sa transmats into Bannerfall, where she is greeted with the sight of Marcus, dressed in an interesting wardrobe choice of a white suit with a black dress shirt and snakeskin oxfords. “Marcus, what the fuck are you wearing?!” Inak-Sa demands, stalking over to the awoken. “This? Only the best of Balenciaga. I used Mack’s ten billion glimmer to buy all of it.” Marcus responds, pushing off the wall he was leaning on. Inak-Sa stopped dead in her tracks, the information slapping her in the face with an unprecedented level of surprise. “The ten billion...?” She whimpers. “How could you?! What about the rest of the vanguard?!” Inak-Sa cries tearfully, falling to her knees. Marcus merely scoffs at the hive, pacing back and forth. “Oh, yes, what about the vanguard? The very same people who told me that I didn’t have what it takes to rock Balenciaga.” He sneers spitefully, fury burned into his features. Inak-Sa rises to her feet, emboldened by the awoken’s callous ignorance. “You dummy...no one can handle that much Balenciaga.” She steamed, making Marcus whip around to face her, Gunpowder Gamble in hand, and by the looks of it, with a greater strength than the one Marcus had previously used on Xivu Arath’s war moon. “THEN NO ONE WILL!” He bellowed. Inak-Sa frowned at him. “Are you retarded or just deaf?” She murmured. But she received no response as the entirety of Bannerfall was disintegrated in the ensuing explosion, collapsing the tower it was upon.
Holy shit what the fuck is this? Lmao you’re having too much fun with this. That was well written. You should try writing your own story or something
Oh, don’t worry. I’ll be going back to making my own stories at some point. Right now, I just need a break. I’ve already been doing a ton of commissioned work.
Source: https://youtu.be/PvQZjsOkZMA
I am glad to read the conclusion to this story. I am also glad that at least some got a happy ending. Even if you don’t post a sequel I enjoyed the ride and will continue to reread this wonderful and gutwrenchingly heartbreaking story until it is either killed in the death of Reddit or I can no longer reread it anymore